Laguna de Bay is the largest lake in the Philippines and the primary source of livelihood for residents surrounding the lake (Photo taken from http://www.dredgingtoday.com)
[This article is originally published in UPIU.com]
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Quezon City, Philippines – Around 200 members of a militant fisher folk organization gathered in front of the Department of Environment and Natural Resources’ (DENR) office earlier today to oppose the 18.7 billion peso rehabilitation project of the Laguna Lake.
Laguna Lake or Laguna de Bay is the largest lake in Asia that covers more than 90,000 hectares, providing fisheries livelihood for the residents surrounding the lake.
The rehabilitation project will be funded by Belgian company Baggerwerken Decloedt en Zoon (BDC). It was originally questioned by local officials for not undergoing a public bidding as required by Republic Act 9184 or the Government Procurement Act.
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